評高中英語作文

『壹』 我寫的高中英語作文，麻煩評下分（滿分20分）

這位同學，嗯..恕我直言，你的作文過於追求所謂的高級短語和詞彙，而且能看出文章有明顯的拼湊痕跡，套話，空話，模式化的結構使用頻率太高，很多短語你還駕馭不了，感覺是為了刻意使用而強行塞進去的。因此，空有argument卻無論證，言之無物，意群連接生硬。如果讓我給分，頂多給你個及格分12.
建議你讀讀這篇，雖然也是模式化寫作，但串聯和所謂的高級詞彙的使用要比你的那篇嫻熟的多。好了，說了這么多廢話，最後再啰嗦一句，祝你高考成功！

Is Television a Blessing or a Curse?
Now, it is generally accepted that television plays an important role in people's lives. But there is an ongoing heated discussion as to whether television is a blessing or a curse.
As is often pointed out by some people, television keeps one better informed about current events, allows one to follow the latest development in politics and science, and offers and endless series of programs which are both instructive and interesting. The most distant countries, the strangest customs and the most attractive scenes of nature are brought right into one's room.
However, other people insist that television is a curse rather than a blessing. They argue that it has brought about many serious problems. The major one is its effects on young people. They are now so used to getting their information, ecation and entertainment from television that their literacy as well as physical ability has been greatly weakened. Even worse than that, vulgar commercials and indecent programs may cultivate their bad tastes, distort their viewpoints towards human life to such a degree that their minds might be corrupted.
In summary, television has both advantages and disadvantages. Whatever effects it has, one thing is certain, television in itself is neither good nor bad. It is the use to which it is put that determines its value to society.

『貳』 高中英語作文,求點評

出現錯誤的地方 已經 紅色標出。如圖。

ps：書信的格式》》？？？？在哪裡》？？

15分我給10分。

紅色的 太多。你看懂了，我就不用講了。

需要講的，麻煩你追問一下。我一個人唱獨角戲太孤單。

『叄』 求高中英語作文佳作及詳細點評

Olympic Games English Composition

The Olympic Games (often referred to simply as The Olympics or The Games) is an international multi-sport event subdivided into summer and winter sporting events. The summer and winter games are each held every four years. Until 1992, they were held in the same year. Since then, they have been celebrated two years apart.

The original Olympic Games began in 776 BCE in Olympia, Greece, and were celebrated until CE 393. In 1896, the ancient Olympic Games were revived at the initiative of a French nobleman, Pierre Fré, Baron de Coubertin, thus beginning the era of the Modern Olympic Games.Since the first modern games, in Athens, Greece, participation in the Olympic Games has increased to include athletes from nearly all nations worldwide.

With the improvement of satellite communications and global telecasts of the events, the Olympics are consistently gaining supporters.The most recent Summer Olympics were the 2004 Games in Athens and the most recent Winter Olympics were the 2006 Games in Turin. The upcoming games in Beijing are planned to comprise 302 events in 28 sports. As of 2006, the Winter Olympics were competed in 84 events in 7 sports.

The Advantages and Disadvantages of Internet

The following aspects could best illustrate the advantages of Internet. Netsurfers in different countries can share interesting knowledge and the latest information. Besides, Internet has provided a major opportunity to buy and sell merchandise . What is more, people may get medical help or even vote on Internet. Its advantages seem countless.

Behind all this glowing talk, however, are some problems. Internet makes people passive by stopping them making their own entertainment. So much so that when there is a breakdown or jam, people may find that World Wide Web turns into World Wide Wait. What is worse, some children have access to the scenes of violence and sex. Apart from these, it can be affected by viruses and hackers.

We should handle its problems, meanwhile we should exploit its potential as well. With proper management of Internet people ought to experience more fruits of the information revolution. All the wisdom of the ages, all the information that has enlightened mankind for centuries, should be available to us with the healthy development of Internet.

The Strength of Belief

On January 29th, the first day of the Chinese year, grandma took me to the Yade Buddha Temple to pray for being able to have a lucky year.

The whole city was dipped in warm light, when we arrived. God! I hardly made out this temple because the whole block was filled with people. We could move our feet just a little at a time. Now you may have the idea how many people there were. But it was amazing that the crowd was so quiet. Worshippers, one by one, seriously knelt down before the statue of the Buddha.

I thought that I hadn』t done anything as earnestly as them when I saw those worshippers praying so devoutly. Everyone kept quiet, closed his eyes. I seemed like that there was only him in this world. I was shocked. From them, I felt the strength of belief. I learnt that not only the belief of the Buddhism, but also the beliefs of all the beautiful things can enable us to be successful. Once we get our belief, the eternal spirit shall help us overcome all the difficulties we might meet with.

I raised my head and saw the Buddha smiling to me so mystically

『肆』 如何有效評講高中英語作文

呵呵，你不會是老師吧？如果你是語文老師的話，我就暈了。這個還得問？好吧 我就隨專便說說了。屬英語作文，無非就那麼幾種形式啦，先把形式給同學們理清楚，然後再就是常用語言，這點在每一篇文章中都能找到啦，然後就是講評文章中的閃光點和加分點。主要還是讓大家自己學會怎麼寫，語法和詞彙是必備的了。～～～～最後說一句，呵呵我是高三生，剛畢業！哈哈

『伍』 高中英語作文點評

第二行來that這樣引導定從不對，換成about
第四自行sell及物動詞，後面要加賓語，前後分局不是因果關系，用so鏈接不合適，選用however比較好
第八行collect當收集講，這里要是想表示保留最好使用keep
第九行give away表示贈送的時候需要接to
第十一行sell them to store to exchange

總的來說還是一片比較通順的文章，從高考角度講大約在二檔中偏下的位置，使用的片語較恰當，但是巨型過於單一並且還有錯誤，建議引入同位語從句和強調句，單詞過於簡單，如果你的作文打算求穩這樣既基本可以，如果要奪高分，就要使用一些高階詞彙和高級句子，比如提建議可引入虛擬語氣，連接詞還應更恰當，使文章更緊密。

『陸』 高中英語作文評分（請高中英語教師進）

It was Grandpa`sbirthday party. Children ignored their grandpa, playing their mobile phone allthe time,① grandpa signed and hearing② their laughter, walked ③to his room lonely. （描述事件）It is we children who are often doing our business at parents` or grandparents`s④ parties. There is no denying that we ignore chat⑤ with our grandparents. （分析現象）What they need is a warm talk, so how should we do atthat party? here⑥ are some tips.
Firstly, never play your mobile phone ring a party, if possible, shut it off.Next, trying to talk with our grandpa isof great significance. Nevertheless,you`d better not talk them with some short words, which will hurt their minds, too.Futhermore,⑦ we ought to drink ⑧with our grandparents, it is a symbol oflove. Lastly, smiling to our grandparents is good.（提出建議）
Such being this case, we will never make our grandparents lonely.
首先是評分問題：（本人參與過高考作文閱卷，按13年標准）
高考作文25分共5檔；初次閱讀後給我印象在四檔（16-20分）
本文謂語及非謂語使用錯誤2處，扣1分；拼寫錯誤兩處，扣1分；語法、大小寫、用詞不當各一處，扣1.5；另外字數方面多餘或少於規定字數20個也在總分中扣去2分；綜上，本文得分16—17分。
一、審題：三個要點：描述事件、分析現象、提出建議，作者在三方面均有涉及，基本分可以拿到。（14分）
遺憾的是，分析欠深入，建議著墨稍多。
二、結構：明顯頭重腳輕，影響閱卷人第一印象。應將篇幅布局勻稱化。
三、扣分點：
①：此處缺連詞，銜接不當，補上 in the meanwhile
②應用heard
③應用walking 非謂語的運用要邏輯縝密
④多了一個s
⑤ignore doing sth.
⑥大寫
⑦拼寫錯誤，應為furthermore
⑧drink 用的不夠恰當
四、亮點
強調結構、同位語、高級詞彙significance，知道用nevertheless替換however 也很不錯，這也是本文可以進入四檔作文的原因。
五、建議：
①分析深入些
②合理布局結構
③修正基本語法錯誤（閱卷時一處扣0.5）
④嘗試使用倒裝、定語從句，有能力的可考慮獨立主格
⑤將銜接詞換的新穎些：如 to commence with ,on top of that, additionally,等等

『柒』 高中英語作文評分2（請高中英語教師進）

高考英語作文評分標准
1 總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。
2 評分時，先根據文章的內容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然後以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調整檔次，最後給分。
3 詞數少於 80和多於 120的，從總分中減去2分。
4 評分時，應注意的主要內容為：內容要點、應用詞彙和語法結構的數量和准確性、上下文的連貫性及語言的得體性。
5 拼寫與標點符號是語言准確性的一個方面，評分時，應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫漢詞彙用法均可接受。
6 如書寫較差，以至影響交際，將分數降低一個檔次。
7 內容要點可用不同方式表達，對緊扣主題的適當發揮不予扣分。
先來說你的語法問題，正如圖片所示as is shown in the picture,而不是at the picture;看著路標是looking而不是looks,後面的knowing之前應該加個and.首字母大寫Here.第二段whose parents而不是who,讓某人失望let sb down更地道一些.What we also should do is to learn......第二段第三行it is前面加個because...other skills.這算作一道提建議的作文，第一第二第三最後說法略顯老套，要我打分就在及格邊緣咯。

『捌』 高中英語作文評分及修改

你好，你的文章抄我看了幾遍，內容要點都按照要求做到了，文章總體思路和用詞都不錯。但是有幾個地方我認為修改下比較好。
1、grandpa signed and hearing their laughter 這句話修改下，寫的不是很好，你仔細看下Signed 這個單詞需要換掉
2、Such being this case 這句話你要表達的是如果我們都能做到這樣或者都能做到以上事項。你寫的這句話不能很好表達，建議修改
繼續努力，加油！

『玖』 高一英語作文評語

總體上來看，文章寫的是有一定水平的，不過作為一篇好的作文評價，我回覺得有一點你要注意，答那就是文章一定不要消極，例如：I hate, I hate a thing,which is called lifetime,is a short life.這一句你要表達的心情我能夠理解，畢竟生命是寶貴的，它很短暫，能不能發揮它的價值，就看你是怎樣看待它的，我個人認為諸如If I could live in the world for ever……，If I could live in the world for ever……這些句子應該在作文中（尤其是大型考試的作文）盡量不要出現，文章應盡量表現出積極的，向上的生活態度和價值觀，另外文中：北戴河 這個詞一定要用 Beidaihe，不要用中文，其他的注意語法和單詞拼寫就可以了，it was very bright WITH the black cloud.大寫部分個人認為改為IN 或 ON比較合適。