Ⅰ 求一篇托福範文
這是戴雲教主修改的一篇範文,希望對你有幫助!
People should not pay for the public transportation. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons or examples or support your ideas.
There are all kinds (of ways 去掉) of public transportation all over the world, which play (the) (an)important role in people』s daily lives. Although nearly (這里用almost或者nearly都可以, 共同點:兩者均可表示「幾乎」、「差不多」,有時可換用:但有時almost比nearly表示更接近的程度,用於 any 以及 no, none, nobody, nothing, never 等否定詞前,可用almost,但不能用 nearly, nearly 前可用 very, pretty, not 等詞修飾,但 almost 之前不能用這些詞:)everybody in different countries needs to use the public transportation, people』s attitudes towards it are entirely different. Some people insist that people should pay nothing for their using (usage) of the public transportation. (pay nothing = free of charge) Meanwhile, those who are strongly opposed to it (這個用法你使用的很好, be opposed to something) cite that people should pay for it if they want to take the advantage of the convenience (有take the convenience of something 的用法么?我沒有找到,你如果有這方面的例子,可以告訴我) of the public transportation. From my own perspective, the latter one is more favorable even though I myself am one of the persons who need to spend money when take the public transportation.
The first reason I want to put forward to support the cause of paying (cause 一般指不好的事情,比如說事故的起因,在這里用有點不合適,這一句話這么說是可以的,但是有點繞,可以直接說 The first reason I use to support my statement) is that any government needs enough money to build up and perfect infrastructures including the public transportation which are of great benefit to the entire people in one country. And where do governments get the money for constructions? People who have some basic common sense should know that it is (from) the pockets of all the citizens where governments get money. Here someone who opposes to (這里用be opposed to doing/something 或者是 oppose something/doing sthing, 但是沒有oppose to do something這個用法的) pay money will probably jump out to claim that now that governments levy taxes they should not ask people for money when they use the public transportation. I will give my point view (觀點是point of view)which is directed against this statement. My opinion is that to build up perfect public transportation nets involving subways,buses and any other traffic transportations or auxiliary installations needs huge public tax subsidies. If all the people use the public transportation for free, it will mean that governments will spend much more money to support the operation of the public transportation. Maybe there won』t be enough money to carry on new constructions. The financial burden of governments resulting from free public transportation might vastly increase and reach the point where they (這里指代有點不明)cannot stand. If we also think over the large amount of fuels used by traffic transportations and the salaries paid to staffs who work to operate the public transportations, I think everyone can reach the conclusion that if one country isn』t so rich that all the people can enjoy high welfare in every area of daily lives(是否可以表達成 if one country is not rich enough to guaranty that all the citizens are covered with the high welfare in every aspects of their daily lives), maybe it』s unavoidable to pay when using the public transportation (the payment for using the public transportation is almost unavoidable). 你可以看一下那個表達方式更好
Another important reason (which) cannot be ignored is that the number of passengers will undoubtedly increase rapidly just like traveling by skyrocket (這里可以說 will undoubtedly be skyrocket/skyrocketing就可以表達你想說的意思了)in case of the totally free public transportation. As we know, public transportation plays an irreplaceable role in people』s daily social life. Particularly in some metropolis like New York, London and Beijing, there is an amazing flow volume of passenger using public transportation everyday. Just imagine the rapidly growing population taking public transportation instead of private vehicles or walking in case that the tickets are free. And the traffic system is likely to be disordered. Can you imagine the picture that hundreds of thousands of people crowd (are crowding, 因為你的picture描述的是一個進行中的狀態,所以用進行時更好,而且要注意並列成分的關系) in subways, or hectometers of long lines in airports are waiting for check in? Beijing』 subways can be taken as a typical example. According to the CCTV, ring the three-day vacation of the May Day, there were nearly 14 million people choose (注意在there be 舉行中的動詞要用進行時或是被動態而不是動詞原形,所以這里應該用choosing)subways to go for a journey. How terrible it is! It will be too crowded to stand if the public transportation is totally free. Consequently, to avoid this disaster, chargeable tickets are needed.
Ⅱ 求托福高分作文(或範文)(要有點評)
下面給出按各評分標準的範文,僅供參考。
題目:Some intensive English programs in the United States offer a foreign student the option of living with an American family while he or she is studying abroad. Many students feel that such a home-stay program is a valuable part of their total learning experience. However, others may feel that such a plan offers little value. In a short essay, discuss one or two advantages of living with an American family and then state one or two disadvantages. Tell whether you are in favor of or opposed to the idea of home-stay. Give examples to support your opinion.
範文一(6分)
A foreign student who plans to come to the United States must have some definite goals in mind. For the student who wants to improve his English quickly and learn about American customs firsthand, there is often an opportunity to live with an American family. There may be one or two disadvantages to this living arrangement; however, I believe that there are far more advantages.First of all, some minor disadvantages to living with an American family include both a lack of privacy and little opportunity to have independence (be independent). For instance, the foreign student may find that the family expects him to join them in group activities such as watching television and going on picnics. At times, however, he might enjoy staying in his room to read or to write letters to his family and friends. Another drawback to living in an American home involves the possibility that the family may treat the student like a child. For example, the parents may want to decide who his friends will be and where he will go ring his leisure time away from home.Even though there may be one or two disadvantages to living with an American family, the advantages far outweigh them. By taking part in a home-stay program, the student has an excellent opportunity to learn about American customs. He will find out how to behave in different social situations such as parties and serimonies (ceremonies) and how to dress (dress on) these occasions. Also, he will learn about many other aspects of the American way of life, such as the way schools are run in the United States. With a family lose by, he can ask questions about attendance rules and school costs. The family will make certain that he becomes acquainted with this new way of life, and soon he will feel at home.Another advantage to lining with an American family is that the student is in an ideal environment to improve his English. For example, each time he has a conversation with someone in the family, this native speaker can help him with his pronounciation (pronunciation) and grammer (grammar). Maybe the younger children in the family can help the student with his homework, too. But the most important thing is that he will be surround (surrounded) by English most of the time ring his stay in the United States.Although I agree that there may be a couple of disadvantages to living with an American family, I feel that the advantages are more obvious. In a home-stay program, the student can learn about American customs in the most natural way possible. In addition, he will find himself in an atmosphere in which his English will certainly improve. In my opinion, these are the two most important goals for him to consider, and living with an American family is the best way to achieve them.
範文二(5分)
Every year, many foreign students go to America to study English. Some of this (them) will participate in a home-stay program and live with an American family. However, others will take (make) a different decision. They will live with friends from their own country. I believe that if a foreign student looks at both possibilities, he will decide to live with an american (American) family. Even though there are one or two drawbacks to the home-stay way (option), there are far more benefits.In taking (making) his decision about how to live in the United States, the foreign student is smart (wise) to consider one or two disadvantages to living with an American family. First of all, he must realize that he is going to feel homesick at first. Living in an American home with people of other (another) language and culture may cause this feeling to increase. Also, the american family could become very protective of him. They may ask him where he is going when he leaves home and when he will return. Despite these two disadvantages, there is a stronger idea (argument) in favor of living with Americans.By living in american (an American) home, the student has (has an) opportunity to become familiar with American customs and culture. For instance, he will learn how important the (the importance of ) family closeness is (closeness). He can see how the children communicate with their parents and how the parents ecate their children. He will not feel like a stranger because the American family will help him adjusting (adjust) to a new life.In an American home, he can learn English fast. Family members can help him with his homeworks (homework). When he speaks English, they can point (point out )his errors. In this way, he can learn English naturally.Although there are some disadvantage (disadvantages) to living with an American family, there are heavier (greater) benefits. If the foreign student at first realizes the values of learning about a new culture and improving his English at the same time, he will definitely choose to experience a home-stay in the United States. With an American family, he will find studying there a very big (rewarding) experience.
範文三(4分)
After a foreign student has decided to come to the United States to study English, he must think about where (where he) is going to live and with whom. I believe that he should live with (an) American family if he can becuase (because) they can give him the support (that) he needs. They can help him improve his English, too.To begin with, the foreigner who inhabits (lives) with an American family can rely on them for suprot (support) as he adjusts to a complete (completely) new way of life. Suppose that (This is especially helpful if) he becomes homesick.Another advantage to living with an American family is (that) the student can improve his English quick (quickly). He will met (meet) friends who came (come) to visit. he (He ) will force (be forced) to use English whether he wants to or not.As far as disadvantages are concerned, I see only one (one:) he may be treated like a baby. The family (family will) want to protect him from danger (dangerous) situations.I will conclude by saying that even is the student has to put up (with) being treated like a child sometimes, he is better off the live (living) with an American family which they (who) can help home. He will find kindness and support when he is new in the country. Also, he will speak English most of the time.
範文四(3分)
A foreing (foreign) student studying in America is wise to live with an American family because when a foreing (foreign) student came (comes) to the United States he must make many important adjustment (adjustments). A foreing (foreign) student must change to survive in his new imvironment (environment). A foreing (foreign) student also learns how to take on responsibilities concerning his new family, he (; he) adopts (adapts) to their American life style (lifestyle) as they adopt (adapt) to his. It is a learning experience on both parts.You have a (A student has an) advantage when living (he lives) with an American family. Because (because) they would (he will) learn the american (American) ways and customs better with an american (American) family than if they would live (he lived) with there (his) own homeboys (countrymen).The american (American) family becomes a second family to the foreing (foreign) student. At times a foreing (foreign) student may get homesick; but having (having) a trustworthy second family can give him the security and acceptance he (that he) needs. He is probably use (used) to having a family around him, so he will feel safe if he lives with an American family. Then he must consider that he will be in a strange place. Everything will be new to you (him).His American family can help him learn his way around. So (Therefore) foreing (a foreign student) is smart to live with an American family.
範文五(2分)
My opinion about this subject is that it depends in (on) your level of comprehension regard (regarding) conversational english (English). In other words; (words,) if you understand a considerable amount of english (English) language, your best bet would be to chose (choose) living with an American family. But, if your comprehension level is so low, in which (that) a basic communication is not possible, then (it) would be wise to (for) you to choose living with people of your same country and (or) language.
對不起哦!
實在沒有找到有點評的……
Ⅲ 求托福185篇範文,要全的.
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Ⅳ 托福獨立寫作求範文
Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, we find that some people hold the idea of A meanwhile others prefer to B, from my point of view, it is more advisable to chose A rather than B. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
The main reason for my propensity for A is that___________________________. 就理由進行解釋_____________________. For instance,____________________
Another reason can be seen by every one is that____________________________. 就理由進行解釋___________________. For example,____________________The argument I support in the first paragraph is also in a position of advantage because_____________________________Although I agree that there may be a couple of advantages of B, I feel that the disadvantages are more obvious. Such as________________.
In a word, ________________________________________________.So, it is sagacious to support the statement that it is better to A.
Ⅳ 求一些托福作文的範文 謝謝
過分強調「範文」的重要性
拿到一篇所謂的範文,首先要思考你看到的範文是不是真內的起到模範的作容用。ETS 給出的托福官方範文其實是有限的,市面上出現的範文,我們一定要謹慎對待。如果你覺得一篇文章真得稱得上範文,那麼你是要學習什麼?學習寫作方法,還是學習裡面的素材,還是語言?有目的性的學習才能發揮範文的真正作用。
Ⅵ 請問托福的綜合寫作和獨立寫作多少字比較好我老師說綜合400獨立700(捂臉哭)
寫作綜合考試的時候在220-300字區間內。獨立寫作寫400-580字就行了。
外國閱卷官主要看回的是語法和答句子段內邏輯。語法和邏輯一定要對,這個對於高分來講比字數要重要得多。
托福確實有寫的多分高的潛規則,如果寫作底子很好,就按老師的試著多寫,如果寫作差一點點就還是寫到300、550字,把文筆先練好。不用追求太多的字數,有字數沒質量的作文得分不會高。
官方要求的是寫滿300字,但是近兩年托福有這樣一個趨勢在邏輯關系、語句結構同等情況下字數越多分會越高。
這個要求只是「建議性」的,並不是硬性規定。針討綜合寫作的字數,ETS指出:考生所寫內容能回答考題,考生不會因為超出規定的字數而被扣分。考生的文章並無上限,在這里提醒大家,考生可以在規定的時間內盡其所能地寫,但寫的內容要切題。